Dancing Around the Elephant

ElephantMy husband hurt my feelings the other day. Apparently, he knew it–or read it in my eyes–because he shoulder-nudged me. The ol’ “I didn’t mean it” shoulder-nudge. When that didn’t work, he did what he could to make me laugh. His attempts are always hard to resist. One of the reasons I love him is because he makes me laugh, so I couldn’t help but to giggle.

But I didn’t let him off the hook.

There was no point discussing it. We both knew the name of the elephant in the room. We’ve been married so long that the words “I’m sorry” are reserved for the really big stuff, so we’ve both mastered the art of non-verbal apologizing. And we both recognize the other’s code for “forgive me.”

He became agreeable, helpful, attentive. All nice, all worth milking for however long I felt he should feel guilty. Of course, he won’t play penitent husband for long, so he brought out the big guns. As we bowed our heads over our meal, he said a special prayer for me to remain healthy and have a good day.

Of course I granted an immediate reprieve. What else could I do?

Non-verbal cues come in handy in life and in writing. Using dialogue to show an all-out war between a couple can be fun, but using finesse and nuance can be challenging and more effective. What isn’t said can blare from a page.

Are you illustrating strong emotions? Look for the less obvious. A passive-aggressive who’s ticked off may add too much salt to a stew before setting it before the object of her ire. A woman who simply “doesn’t want to talk about it” will go to extremes to change the subject. A man who’s on the verge of tears at seeing his daughter in her wedding gown may crack a joke.

You don’t have to look farther than your own idiosyncrasies and those of the people you’re most familiar with to find examples. Capture these for the page to add depth to the emotions you want to portray.

About Linda W. Yezak

Author/Freelance Editor/Speaker (writing and editing topics).
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6 Responses to Dancing Around the Elephant

  1. Harliqueen says:

    A great post, although it’s nice that it happened, things like that in life remind you of what can work in writing 🙂

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  2. Gay Ingram says:

    Excellent post, Linda. Especially effective when you use personal experience to illustrate. Gotta love being married.

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  3. I have to agree with everyone, life sure can teach you a lot about human relationships, and I love how you tied it in with writing. Great example of less is often more. Thank you.

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